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| The poems selected this year demonstrate an impressively wide range
of technical expertise, and a really satisfying sense of how form can bring
content into fresh focus. I am delighted to see that writers are still
exploring closed forms such as the pantoum, sonnet, villanelle and sestina.
But there's much more to composition than simply selecting a shape, and the quality of open form poetry here also represents a strong sense of key poetic techniques, such as the balance of the line, the pattern of sound textures, and the all important anchor of figurative language to bring the ideas into a physical, tactile and visual world. This is what the winner of the Open category does with such expertise, never wandering off into mixed metaphor or conceits, but using that close concentration on the needle to sharpen the effect (pun intended). HK |
BEST POEM | Needle (After Pablo Neruda) Sue Chadd Wiltshire, UK You're an electric bolt You strive to warm the world, as women in a war, repairing You can draw blood, too, awakens my desire, |
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| RUNNER UP | Barn Owl
David Burns Oxfordshire UK Im walking the track round the hurst as the day undefines, the last green shapes dissolving into grey. Sound closes in to only the resistance of air pushed against me and grass stalks crushed by my tread. I see my way by the gleam of worn ground and the paleness beside the path of Cow Parsley, Jack-in-the-Hedge: names that you taught me... ...how long has it been there? I stand for a while |
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| RUNNER UP | St Ninian's
Isle, Shetland Hilary O'Shea Oxfordshire UK Circling the isle in the infant light I trespass on holy ground grazed since Neolithic times. Arctic terns squeal outrage. Great skuas launch a surprise attack, I am just a gate-crasher fragile as a fulmar's egg |
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| highly commended | Moonshadows Sue Chadd Wiltshire UK We are not evil nor unclean under the veil. Our minds, On star studded nights Daily I pray for the moon I will not let all be lost. In secret, Even if it ends |
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| highly commended | Southside
Girl David Woodruff New Jersey USA I got a sometimes girl who lives on the Southside. She says I gotta be out before her old man gets in.
Alright? In bed my wife and I lie like two holed kites. I once thought of perfect houses multiplying like a franchise. In the next room, I can hear this chica's baby cry. On the phone, she says she can't talk, it hurts to blink. |
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| highly commended | Your Skin and
Mine Marian Woolley Rwanda Africa I am mzungu lady, my skin is watercolour Sun-tan brown, milky white, slightly pink and red Occasionally a mole, as dark as African Maybe reminding everyone: mankinds origin. You your skin is oil paint Your hand is bigger than mine To talk of the colour of skin But this is a celebration Our legs a forest: mahogany and silver birch, |
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| commended | Storm on
Stronsay Nick Morgan N Yorkshire UK In a blow too fierce to walk we battled obliquely to the wheel-less Escort archived in the yard. With windows wound half-down in the mouth of the storm-winds full grey roar that shoveled titanic trenches from the sea and heaped the spoil as jerry-built waves to tumble thunderously against the shore. From this salt-grimed, makeshift hide we saw But by morning, with all its strength blown out, |
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| commended | Morning of the
Announcement David Woodruff New Jersey USA She stood square in our kitchen, our stepmother. Rueful. We turned to each other, mybrothersandsisters, |
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| commended | Ted
Hughes Henry Oliver Bedfordshire UK Wordsmith of rugged sensitivity; Like an otter into water Words melt into poetry. White-hot language beaten In the furnace mouth By the hammer tongue Against the anvil world, Crushed and cooled like coal into verse: The most new from the most ancient, A reconfiguring of time Into violence and simplicity, A suspension of natures chaff Beaten and sculpted into gold Wheat-mounds, glacier like in their Deep groove and shift and under-slip Of self-perpetuation, The voice of language scarred and slashed Into the valley left behind. After violation: meaning. |
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| commended | On
Parting Biljana Scott Oxfordshire UK I dont trust absence, I said, and in my mind twin tracks set on forever are wrenched mid- and a goods train of fresh-made promise hurtles down some sudden abyss while the protagonist, reaching for the far cliff of our treads air, but never fast enough to out- I turn away so as not to watch you go |
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| commended | Meeting You
Hilary O'Shea Oxfordshire UK Meeting you was like that time I had my ears washed out (birdsong was deafening) or when I first wore glasses I had to shade my mind against the glare. Now we live by a softer light As the brindled leaves slowly fall |
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| commended | Short October
Light Diane Smith Minnesota USA Nasturtiums and chrysanthemums |
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| commended | Artefacts Nick Morgan N Yorkshire UK 1. I recall my maiden trip to Sutton Hoo as a day of grave, appropriate rain that had thinned the crowds and made it easier to construe the meaning of this ground. To imagine that interring rite, with each essential treasure drawing sighs from those gathered there through loyalty or love. And what would have driven the rawest lamentation? 2. And yet what drew And feeling still the need for preparation, |
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| commended | The Cruellest
Month K.V.Skene Oxfordshire UK Girls with flushed cheeks drunk on April and Eliot, boys with the chiclet grins of American clowns, the little they know a slight weight on their shoulders: a bookbag, an iPod, a bottle of wine. Boys with the chiclet grins of American clowns Sharing willow-green shade, boys and girls watch the river Pheromones spiral extramild April air as, breathless and beautiful, she splashes into the river, One step too far - past 'Danger Deep Water'. She's shivering on shore with her shocked-sober friends, |
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| commended | My
Mistake Trevor Belshaw Nottinghamshire UK I did something stupid. Then lied, but you knew. I opened a window and your love went on through. I tried to revive it, I tried, how I tried, but it had frozen to death in the cold, dark, outside. |
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| Comic Poems |
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In the Comic category I was delighted to
find more than simply resorting to devices of rhyming and rhythmic repetition,
although these do often work to good effect with lighter subjects.
There is a satisfying exploration of voices and techniques, playful liberties with language and forced rhyme, and a sense of tailoring and shaping to fit the subject. Parody, cross-over genres (such as rap) and social satire are all successfully explored, and devices such as lists, lexical repetition and juxtaposed incongruous images all serve the pieces well. HK |
BEST COMIC POEM | The Landlord is my Shepherd John Wright Tasmania Australia The Landlord is my shepherd; I shall not own. He maketh me to lie down in rented premises; He leadeth me around on the three-monthly visits. He restoreth my goal: He leadeth me up the paths of righteousness For his clients sake. Yea, though I walk through the chalet with the valet of death,
Thou preparest a table before me Shirleys good wage and mercy shall follow me |
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| RUNNER UP | The Day Kitty
Knitted an Orgasm Sarah Macleod Oxfordshire UK Ive led a lonely life she said veined hands looped with skeins of wool only no-one has paid any heed and picking up her needles she slowly knitted onepurledone passed a slipstitch over. I wed a humdrum man she said though some- how when he was dead drunk he was fun and picking up her needles she up-tempo knitted onepurledone passed a slipstitch over. Suddenly and at speed she picked up her need- les and knitted plain and purl plain and purl hands a blur fingers whirl chevron, emboss- ed diamonds, moss panels, pyramids, roman stripe, twin ribs, waterfall, seafoam, beestitch, honeycomb, triangles, close checks, windmill, stockinets, until the room was full of tremblingtightlyknitted wool; she was buried in a rush casket of double basket weave in fancy openwork ridges after the last of her knitonepurlones when shed slipped away passed over and breathlessly cast off. |
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| highly commended | A Cautionary
Tale For Poets Don Nixon W Midlands UK He claimed to be a national bard And leader of the avant garde. He wore a mauve artistic hat Wrote obscure verse and kept a cat. All rhyming couplets made him sneer, Gave pain to his poetic rear For formal verse he found a bind Claimed words should never be confined. He read reviews but never verse And thought revision made it worse. He said, "Compose it on the spot `Emotion recollected` - Rot!" One day in search of something new The Zoo Board took a PR line It states in fancy copperplate |
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| highly commended | Rent-A-Nut
Kevin Loughnane Dublin Eire It makes no sense To offer as rent A recipe for apple pie Or to ask the reason why I will not accept An old scouting tent Oh why do I find myself derided |
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| highly commended | Apathy
Judith Barrow Pembrokeshire Wales Ive reached the age of apathy - I think. I blink, and in a minute the urge to work it out has disappeared. I flout the laws of life - refuse to see the fear and can ignore the pain. Ive trained myself to turn away, to live to fight another day - or not Ive told myself I refuse to vote. Though on a note of caution (What do we want? |
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| highly commended | The
'Ospital Clive Wyatt Devon UK They got me in the 'ospital An' mucked me all abaht They poked fings in me ear'oles And they poked fings up me snaht They took me bloomin temperature An' took me pulse an' all Then took me bloomin togs away And that aint bloomin all They got me bloomin dopey Until I lost me wits Then buggered me insides abaht An' kept the bloomin bits! |
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| commended | Small Town
Jackie Juno Devon UK Here comes Molly with tartan trundling trolley and cloud-lumbering brolly she makes misery look jolly. She's lived at Number nine for nine million years, Molly; always carries a pac-a-mac. Molly. Never been high, but loves being down. |
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| commended | Life in Music
[Dedicated to My Rock-God Guitarist Husband] Jackie Juno Devon UK You are Captain Beefheart around the house and therefore Tuesdays CAN be fun. In the winter sometimes We do Incredible String Band, and I can do Janis Spring brings Pink Festival summer - jigs, jazz, zydeco, trance Music shared is a love, And it is good |
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| commended | I Fell in Love
with an Estate Agent Steven Beattie Lancashire UK Browsing brochures describing flats suitable for singles she caught my eye; a beautiful desirable property, displaying a magnificent frontage, well maintained, perhaps in need of a little sympathetic restoration. I slyly suggested we immediately exchange contracts, she replied that I had potential- possibly, but insisted on a full survey before completion. Her main concern seemed to be my open plan libido and semi detached underpants; comments that caused a certain subsidence in my flimsy foundations. Still, I did perceive a coded proposal of passion and hastily arranged a viewing, (strictly without obligation of course), after tests for dry rot and sagging expectations we tottered to the bedroom. Taking a lead from the exquisitely exposed beams I did the same myself. By the time she'd stopped laughing it was too late; maybe I should have explained that all measurements are approximate. |
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| commended | Seventy
Anthony Scott Surrey UK Seventys the age of knowledge When others look to you for guidance On things they should have learnt in college Like putting technique and tax avoidance On how to fill in crossword puzzles On how a hat can look sartorial Seventy! The age to be sagacious |
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| commended | Talking About
Wine Mary Whitsell Dumfriesshire Scotland Pale and greeney straw, they say Firm and crisp, this Chardonnay Ripe black fruits and mulberry Good mouth-feel, that Burgundy Peach and apricot (a hint) Oakey body, hints of spice Steely palate, full bouquet |
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| commended | Advice to
Bears Laura Garratt London UK Now Goldilocks was a hungry chick. |
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| commended | The
Mumps Stephanie Ellis London UK "His glands are swollen - he's got the mumps" The doctor said, as he felt the bumps. It hurt to swallow, my neck was sore, My ears were aching and my throat was raw. "No school for you, my lad" he said, For nearly a week I was too ill to care By the following week I became such a pest Looking through the window just isn't the same I could hear their shouts and whoops of glee |
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| commended | Food Haiku
Trilogy Jackie Juno Devon UK BREAKFAST HAIKU Frosties, once tasted by a child can make cornflakes sadly redundant. SNACK HAIKU DINNER HAIKU |
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| commended | Lollipop Lady
Clive Wyatt Devon UK Lovely Mrs Lollipop Flavour of my day If I licked you all over Would you tell me to STOP? Would you Mrs Lollipop? Lovely Mrs Lollipop Would you? |
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| Junior Poems |
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In the Junior category, I simply love the
winning entry. It is remarkably assured for the poet's age, and indicates a
very keen poetic sensibility at work. In many of these pieces selected there is a feeling for linguistic texture as well as imagery, and it heartens me that younger writers can fall in love with the patterns of our rich language in all its varieties, in heightened registers as well as in the vernacular. HK |
BEST JUNIOR POEM | Littlehampton Sam Ryde age 7 London UK The River Arun |
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| RUNNER UP | The Beauty of
the Sea Ellie Pritchard age 14 Northamptonshire UK As she throws her anger upon the wind, Upon the sky and land, She thrashes down her mighty fists, And throws up rock and sand, Her former placid beauty, Replaced by roaring rage, A furious act of vengeance, Upon a world wide stage, She tosses her deep blue hair, From ripples up to waves, To toy and drown her prey, And drag them to watery graves, Her outer shell is turmoil, Though her watery depths are calm, Her faithful fish companions, Safe from her thundering storm. |
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| highly commended | If
Only...... Blane Asfaw age 11 London UK Oh, If only I was an eagle I'd soar through the sunlit skies Shooting through the air like a fiery star I'd go to the horizon, Oh yes! Oh but woe is me, I'm just a feeble human. Oh, If only I was the ocean Oh if only I was the tree No amount of wishing, waiting, wanting |
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| highly commended | Here's to you
Catherine Schroeter age 14 North Yorkshire UK Heres to the girl, who always seems to be broken. Heres to the words that never get spoken. Heres to the lies that we hear each and every day. And heres to the faces that show were never afraid. Heres to the boy whose smile became shattered. Heres to the punk who thinks his anarchy will hit. Heres to the stereotypers, the hypocrites, the jokes and
the players So heres to every single one of you |
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| commended | The Old Wooden
Wagon Ellie Pritchard age 14 Northamptonshire UK The wheels turn over the road, With the splash of rainwater, And creak of old wood, The ancient wagon rolls into town, Bright paint a-blaze in an evening sun. The wheels turn over the road, Shining silk hide a-gleam in the setting sun. And the ancient wagon rolls into town. |
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| commended | The Final
Countdown Rebecca Bull age 15 Nottinghamshire UK Under the crawling blue carpet In the shimmering depths of the ocean Where flashes of colour spark From darting fish, suspended in The bright coral, content, carefree. But the clear water blackens The cool, safe cave, a shelter Droplets of water stir the muzzle All things start but nothing lasts |
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| commended | Creation and
Destruction Patrick Pollard age 12 Gloucestershire UK I came at the start to a barren Earth, Yet where my foot steps fell sweet Nature gave birth To water and rocks,to animals and plants 'Till in the sea fish swam and in the sky birds danced. All was so happy there was peace and calm, The world was untainted, the forests flourished, Then out of the ranks of beasts and birds, Mankind they call themselves a name for one and all, They build huge towers, to the sky, they say, Two thousand years later destroyed was the Earth, I came at the end to a barren waste, |
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| commended | The One That
Got Away. Jess Howell age 15 Hampshire UK There were two of us, sat in that cell, wondering how we had made it into Hell. It was so cold, It felt so lonely, It shouldn't of happened, I heard him say it, The cell door opened, He committed it, How could I live my life in this cell, |
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| commended | Life of a Cat
Emma Yeo age 12 Tyne & Wear UK The way he looks at me with his beady eyes Stalking his next prey Waiting in the shadows for them to appear Devious, mischievous little thing When he grabs them, all mercy is lost His greedy stare says it all While I bury his old toy He looks around for more game. He never finds it though not today He walks away defeated, swaggering along still. Tiger of the field yet not so brave King of the jungle yet not so mighty. Comes over to me after his hunt , Purrs at me and looks at the table expectantly. I cannot deny him his once-a-week treat and Pull apart my sandwich, a titbit off the end for him. No more stalking just a gentle creature now He lies down on a cushion, purrs and sleeps. He is quite and peaceful Until tomorrow. |
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| commended | My
Rabbit Luke Cordas age 11 Wiltshire UK She danced across the thick blades of grass This is what I love, She chewed and chewed - like her teeth were made of metal, This is what I love. The hutch was abandoned and horrible, silent and cold, This is what I hate, Obnoxious beauty, pretty rudeness - acting like I'm not there, This is what I hate. Despite her rudness and her wonderful beauty, I love her, Like a baby and it's thumb, I love my rabbit! |
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| Local Poems These poems are all by authors living in Faringdon and surrounding villages |
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Local poets should not quail at comparison
with those from further afield, and there is a strong local presence in the
Open category as well, and clearly some very accomplished Faringdon
writers. A sense of humour is apparent here too, and the Wordsworth and WC Williams pastiches are both witty and well-penned. The prize winning local poem has a remarkable deftness of touch, and all of those commended have kept their language vivid and uncluttered and avoided too many abstractions. All the very best writers keep their own sense of place and community, and that is the case in a considerable number of these locally generated poems too. HK |
BEST POEM BY A LOCAL AUTHOR | Pausing for Breath in the Sierra Nevada David Burridge You came from the north to pace the land, in your high tech boots with laid down plans. Pause for breath and listen there is another rhythmn to be found. It is heard in the goats scattered music, It is seen in the old men's quiet council That is the time to stop and rest. |
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Translations Scharlie Meeuws At the curve of the river Songs unfold like lagoons, Language may alter with distance, |
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| highly commended | White Horse at
Uffington Hilary O'Shea White horse moored mid-gallop, straining to be off. How I long to set you loose |
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| highly commended | Alhambra was
Nearby David Burridge In these streets buldings lean together Nearby tapping mallets carved out daily prayers, But here God is not the conqueror. Old slogans promising pavement insurrection, |
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| highly commended | An Hour in
Canterbury Beau Hopkins Last year I found an hour. I spent it in the Butter Market, drinking It did me a power of good Above my head a music played Across the cobbled square doted on the stones gaily, and professional. and I saw the babies push and the buskers voice before the hour was up. a feeling came, but not of grief before the agony. stays secret, like fire in flint. They show their solidarity |
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| highly commended | Tripping up
Montsegur David Burridge This path doesn't welcome me, wishes me away, binding iteslf tighter to its siege terrain. Since its fall thousands of feet have worn its stones marble smooth. Steel clad feet,crusaders bent on holy stabbing. Listen! Beyond our panting and pumping |
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| commended | Needs Must
when the Devil Drives David Burridge It was my mother's mantra as she went to polish for other folk. My father's devil was at the bottom of a mineshaft, a crippled hand and dust in the throat No amount of beer could wash away. Work always reeked of sweat, they were driven by an empty plate. As a young man in modern times I declared there was light
ahead. No need to belong I was on the way to find myself. I reached the summit and stood in the sunlight Now I am back on flat earth I sometimes catch the old smell, |
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First Draft Pete King I ambled sadly moungst swirling fog. Which hangs ore dales and mountaintops. Suddenly, I spy, emerging flocks. Multitudinous yellow holy hocks. Adjacent a pond, above worn grass thinned. Eyes blinking and fox trotting in the wind. Consistent as the moon that glows. Which flashes silver next to Mars. Elasticized tward the vanishing rows. At the edge of a blue tarn. Oh so many, spied in a flash. Shaking wigs in a fizzy splash. Crashing by beach, in a waltz, what was it? Beats the twinkling tidal expanse. A verse constructer jumps from the closet. Wearing happy clothing to be seen. I Stared - and stared but didnt think. A rich theatre I saw, plus a wink. I oft recline in my chair. Cranially rested, or worried sick. Sudden recall, from cells below the hair. Ecstatic isolation, which I pick. A wave of excitement from head to socks. I tangoed with the hollyhocks. |
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| commended | Dear William
Carlos Williams - In Response.... Steven Messenger I confess That my Nocturnal fast Is unbroken The Ghosts Forgiveness is |
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| commended | The Letter
Joanne Collins Sorry I left you all alone Sorry I forgot to phone I should have told you not to wait Saying I was working late So many angry words were said As I left you crying in your bed I feel that now I must be free I know to this you won't agree So I think it so much better To end it all within a letter I'm sorry if I've caused you pain I won't be coming back again I wish you well with all my heart I feel its best that we should part Yet as we go our separate ways remembering the happy days Once I loved you oh so dearly Now I end this letter with yours sincerely The Reply Yes I waited all alone |
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| commended | The Music
Lesson David Burridge The first time I heard them just been caned, sting still dancing on my fingers, a lesson in rhythm he called it. Outside I would have bawled. Shiny black disc drawn from its sleeve, From the first shout of the trumpet My pulse had hardly started, In those days Jazz was never heard Later I became cool, no air gutar for me I saw a photo of some old-timers |
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| commended | Philosophical
Reflections In Ancient Spoof Format Harry Mitchell What is poetry? No one knows. Wet paint. Keep off. This means
you. Grass is green. Sky is blue. Three Hundred Spartans in a heap. Mountains high. Valleys low. Icarus said that he could fly. Parrots whistle
Pigeons call. You, my reader, have wasted time. Babies gurgle... Lovers sigh. |
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| commended | Dear Craig
Raine's Martian: Their Heads have two small holes Steven Messenger Their heads have two small holes To help receive ideas Which echo round inside Then leak as voice or tears The holes aside their heads To keep heads fully-charged It tells them to connect The box gives life and voice |
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| commended | What a Waste
of Badedas and Bathwater! Jaqueline Wharton If only I could have slept last night - Making these decisions now, might Not be such a traumatic task. The hair to mousse or the face to mask? Or maybe a subtle colour to hide the grey? This lunchtime date, hopefully, may Make me feel glad my toenails are "Cherry" And - should I remember not to drink sherry? Now - is the back door locked and secured? Oh! was that the fiendish 'phone I heard? For goodness sake! Immerse yourself! This bath is becoming a Hazard to Health!! The way we met? - well, you read it in books: Blast! I thought that I had heard a sound |
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